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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Escape (01/02/06)

TITLE: All My Towels from the Motel 6
By Georgiana Daniels
01/04/06


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Calgon, take me away.

The crazy lady in the commercial ainít got nothing on me, I thought as I locked the bathroom door. Itís the last room in the house where I wonít be pestered for another cup of juice or asked for help with Algebra. Today was harder than usual, and all I needed was a few minutes alone, preferably in the tub like the Calgon lady, but the mini-tub in our trailer is only big enough for the munchkins.

The water line busted while we were trying to yank out the dishwasher to put in a new one. I was flustered, and tempted to get downright angry, but this time, thank God, I didnít cross the line. My husband once told me that Iíd complain if that proverbial sack of gold fell and doinked me on the head, so this time I was determined to keep my peace.

Sopping up water from the kitchen floor proved to be more difficult that Iíd imagined. Sure, it would be OK for someone with heavy duty towels, or even someone with a good wad of Brawny. Me, I only got ten towels from the Motel 6, and pretty much theyíre all see through now. So there I was, holding my peace while swooshing the water around on the floor, but not making it any drier. I figured it was probably the cleanest my kitchen floor would ever get.

Good thing I read my Bible today. Maybe God was preparing me for what was to come by leading me to the story of Noah during my morning quiet time. He does that, you know, leads me to the exact words I need for the day. I hope that tomorrow He doesnít lead me to the story about the fiery furnace.


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Rene McCollum01/09/06
I enjoyed your musings. I had no trouble relating; you would have no trouble fitting into my world.
Deena Walls01/09/06
Great story I am with ya sister Calgon Lord please!I even giggled outloud! Thanks for sharing!
Karen Heslink01/10/06
Boy don't we all need the life of the Calgon lady! You drew us a very nice little descriptive narrative on real life. The ending is especially effective. Well done.
Teresa Hollums01/12/06
I, too, have such frustrations.
Sandra Petersen 01/13/06
This was fun to read because of the voice you gave the narrator, complete to the words "ain't", "munchkins", "doinked", among others. Makes the narrator seem like she is carrying on a conversation with a friend.
You tell us a lot about the narrator by your choice of words. She is married, has a temper that ignites a little too easily when a life challenge rears its ugly head, is a Christian who reads her Bible every day, is maybe not the cleanest of homemakers because she says this is the cleanest her kitchen floor will ever get, perhaps can't afford a lot of extras like thick store bought towels or paper towels.
Your last paragraph was a gem!
Terrific job!
Phyllis Inniss 01/13/06
Great article and fun to read. I'd like to know about the Calgon lady, not being from the USA.
Amy Michelle Wiley 01/14/06
I got a little confused as to how she got from the bathroom to the kitchen, but otherwise this was well done! Good job!
Linda Germain 01/15/06
One of my FAVORITE sayings,"Calgon...take me awaaayyy!"
Your character is very believable and has the makings of some wonderful insight; but, I was really hoping she would feel convicted for stealing all those Motel 6 towels! :0)

Still, a cute approach. I'd like to see her in future stories! We can all relate.

Blessisngs~ LG
Linda Germain 01/15/06
sorry...my "S" finger got carried away! BLESSINGS :0)
Val Clark01/16/06
The real voice of a person who tries to walk the talk in a down to earth way. Thanks for posting. Keep up the writing.
Folakemi Emem-Akpan01/16/06
Thanks for sharing ths frustrations of a woman I can relate with. Wonderful piece