The Official Writing Challenge
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03/17/16
Nicely done...good storyline!

Blessings~
Nicely done.
It's scary to leave your comfort zone and embrace something different.
Different, is the place of newness, fun, and adventure.
You did a great job. You pulled me in right away. You did an awesome job of building the suspense and making me feel for the MC. I love the message too.
03/17/16
I was drawn into the story from the very beginning. I kept thinking my writing could use some of the teacher's advice... let your words flow.
03/20/16
Nicely done. I liked how the story drew me in right from the beginning. You have a knack for storytelling.
03/22/16
The teacher offered a devastating critique and "messed up" Judy's painting. I like the way she accepted the criticism and figured out how to integrate the teacher's changes into her overall plan.

In a way, though, I would give you the opposite advice: tighten up. Ferret out passive voice. Look for stronger verbs in place of "was."
03/24/16
Congratulations, Kelly, on your first place in the Beginners category. I thought you nailed the topic for this week.
03/24/16
Congrats!
Blessings~
Congrats on your piece placing.
Congratulations on ranking 1st in your level and 15 overall. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.
04/16/16
I really enjoyed your story. Just one bit of red ink...I think you could have ended it with the "colors uniting" line and it would have been more intriguing just like the painting.

Congratulations on your well deserved 1st place ribbon.
04/16/16
oops I meant your line- "colours mingling that was…uniting."