The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh I enjoyed this!
A sentimental yet joyful entry. well done.

God bless~
I loved this. Remember to put spaces between paragraphs to make it easier to read.

Good job!
Great one, blessings
Thank you, I enjoyed this beautiful story. Don't forget to put spaces between the paragraphs. That way it will be easier to read. Good luck and God bless xo
Great step back into a kid's POV. Well done - and welcome to the FW Family, from one Aussie to another.
You won't be a "Beginner" for long, with excellent and inspiring entries like this! I truly enjoyed this, and look forward to more of your stories - paragraphed, of course . . .
Very entertaining story. I felt the buy's angst. Nice job.

Suggestion: when you preview your entry before submitting, make sure there are hard returns. You want a blank line between paragraphs for your writing to be easier on the eyes by the readers.

Keen writing. You have talent.
You've a delightful way of rendering your characters POV :-) this was an easy read that had me smiling throughout! Well done and welcome to the family
Great storytelling ability. The MC had so much spirit, and I could just see him adjusting his cape.

I agree about the spacing, but I am sure that won't be a problem next time.
Great story, and how true to a child's perception. I remember when I had to overcome the challenges of water, the fears and sense of accomplishment. Great story, I agree with the statements about the spacing, but that is so minor. Great writing!
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