The Official Writing Challenge
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12/12/05
Oh MY! This is AWESOME!
I really enjoyed reading it,and imagining about this little tree.
12/13/05
Nice rhyme scheme, nearly perfect meter (with just a few rough spots).

In your first stanza, "Its" seems to refer to the year, rather than to the tree.

Your last 4 stanzas really drew me in--I read them several times. The emotion is clearly depicted, but the symbolism is difficult.

All in all, there is much to like here. I'll be returning to this one.
12/13/05
Very nice poem!

Keep an eye on your spelling. "Ageing" should be "Aging".

"Paralysed" I believe should be "Paralyzed".

These are small things, but misspellings could catch the eye of an editor and hurt your work.

Your prose is very good. Keep writing:)
01/28/06
Dear Yvonne, I read all three of your sharings. I love the way you discribe and the thoughts you convey.
Welcome to faithwriters and I hope to read many more of your entries. Thank you for your comment on my last entry; Calendar of my heart.
I know what it is to write about, and in, pain. But we have our Comforter. Your "Little Tree" reminds me of my entry; Restless Seed. Each making a statment!
Take care, God bless, Jacque