The Official Writing Challenge
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This is interesting. I felt a genuine sense of passion as I read this. I'll admit I wasn't positive who he was. At first I thought he was perhaps a minister who became greedy--a false prophet. Near the end, I wondered if he was the devil himself. It may just be my brain is running slow today. Be careful of typos like u instead of you and new instead of knew. It helps to find a challenge buddy or critique group who might find errors like that. If you don't have someone, read the other articles and if you click with someone, don't be afraid to ask if she is interested. I think your message is beautiful and powerful. It won't surprise me at all to see God use your wonderful words in different ways, touching people in ways you may never expect.
07/17/15
I really enjoyed this intense and introspective piece. Well done.
God bless~
An interesting take on an 'ugly' tourist. A different angle to discuss the issue from. Well done.