The Official Writing Challenge
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06/04/15
It is so sad to think about all the Jewish people who were denied jobs, honors, and life because of their ancestry. Unfortunately, anti-Semitism is on the rise all over the world.

My hope is that the Jewish people will discover that their Messiah has already come!

Compelling and well researched true story.
Wow, this is a stunning piece. You pulled me 80 years into the past, and made the time come alive. I wasn't aware of all the things you mentioned. It's so important to keep telling these stories lest we ever forget.

My red ink is minor. I don't think you needed to us both maniacal and maniac in the same line. Also in this line: I and my Jewish teammate we were... You didn't need we, instead you could have written My fellow Jewish teammate and I were...

I think you did a lovely job of writing on the topic. It was quite clever to set it at the Olympics. What a wonderful way to show the whole world other than at the event where much of the world is represented.
06/11/15
Congratulations on your 2nd place award. The reading of your story was even better the second time around.
06/12/15
Congratulations on your placing for such a well-crafted entry. Your previous entries show a similar grasp of history and great skill in bringing it to life. Well done.