The Official Writing Challenge
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12/07/05
Good job at creating tension for your readers. A few picky suggestions: Tell your reader how old Maggie is, work on punctuation of dialog, and
12/07/05
(Oops, hit the button too soon.)

...and stick to one title.

I really like this faithful little family!
12/09/05
Loved your story! You captured Spring, captured a happy family picnic, a new birth and what brought me to tears was the father's prayer...praying that "we need a little help down here", and their faith. Lovely story, very well written and touched this Readers inner soul. Kudos!