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12/07/05
I like the symbolism of the yellow flower, but it almost sounds as if your narrator considers the flower to be an incarnation of the daughter. A slight re-write, maybe?

This sentence: is gorgeous. So full of hope. Thanks!
12/07/05
Whoops, I forgot to copy the sentence that I liked:

I have had my Fall and I have had my Winter. Is it time for me to blossom?

Beautiful.
12/07/05
Nicely done. I was a little confused when you mentioned new brothers and sisters. Are these actual brothers and sisters or brothers and sisters in Christ?
12/10/05
This was such a beautiful worded essay, with such a beautiful ending...but I'm lost as to what I am reading about. Is this a child laid to rest? Has she been reincarnated through the yellow flower? I'm stymied.

Perhaps I'm just dense, or am simple-minded, as I always call myself - but there is no doubt that this is beautifully written..whatever the meaning, and I loved each touching thought. Just wish I could understand. God Blessed you magical talent!
12/10/05
Oops, a typo...so "Here I am Again...God blessed you with magial talent...I meant to say.