The Official Writing Challenge
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12/07/05
Usually thoughts and prayers are put in italics, but since most of this story is a prayer, perhaps you could put the dialog at the end in italics, to signal the switch to your readers.

I'm not sure she's ready for Michael, if she still loves Steve. Maybe she should be working on reconciliation with him?

What I really liked about this was your protagonist's conversational approach to prayer--it seems as natural to her as breathing, and that is very special, indeed.
12/08/05
Realistic portrayal of a struggling, hurt, confused mind. Good job conveying her frustration and uncertainty.
12/21/05
Received your ty msg. So, am reading more of your work. My biggest surprise is that this one, "Heart Thaw", "Rose Bush" and "Vines and Whines" are written by a man; Unless, of course, you are writing under an assumed name. Nice writing...and will continue to follow your progress. I see I predicted your win in Vines & Whines... Hmmmm!
Keep up the good work!