The Official Writing Challenge
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12/06/05
Very charming: calling your car your "Pony." I like it.

Be wary of using the dictionary in your piece. There's a reason people don't read dictionaries: definitions aren't inherently interesting. There are almost always better ways to start an essay.

I loved your essay, especially since by the title I was anticipating another essay altogether. Well done!
12/06/05
I agree with Jan. This reads better if you start with paragraph 3. Help me experience what's it's like to actually drive the mustang for the first time in months.
I had to stop and re read the pony part again. It took me a minute to realize the car was the pony..nice touch. Yes, please be careful of dictionaries. Mice read.