The Official Writing Challenge
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12/05/05
Like seeing spring through a child's eyes. They "get it" when adults don't. Nice concept.
Very sweet little story.
12/06/05
Very nice. This is Tammy's story - I'd like it better if it was Tammy thanking God for Spring at the end of the day. Separate the dialogue into new paragraphs.
12/07/05
Sweet little vignette. There are some punctuation problems in the 4th paragraph.

Makes me miss my own little giggling girls (now all grown up). Thanks!
12/09/05
"running down the stairs calling her mother Sarah, whom"....A little grammar and punctuation problem here; but otherwise a sweet little story. Thank you for sharing this Spring blessing.