The Official Writing Challenge
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This is quite interesting. You did a great job of bringing the foreign culture to life for me. I can't imagine trying to understand the customs. Tiny red ink-- you commented about your face turning red and purple. Unless you had a mirror or could see your reflection in the glass, you wouldn't be able to know what color your face is. It's a tiny technicality, but something to be aware of. Perhaps instead you could say something like: As my blood rushed to my face, I could feel the heat radiating off my face. I think you did a nice job of attempting this different topic this week. It's definitely an autobiographical piece. I delighted in your ability to laugh at yourself now (and then ;) ). You have a subtle sense of humor and you made me smile several times.
10/11/14
Interesting story told with a certain amount of levity and poise. Well done, I enjoyed it.
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