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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Vines (11/21/05)

TITLE: The final plea
By T. F. Chezum
11/27/05


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I sit alone in my duress,
with all I know I should confess,
I feel like love and happiness just fell between the lines.

And though I try to hide the pain,
the tears still cause my face to stain,
it's more than I can now contain, my sanity resigns.

I do not know where life went wrong,
I feel I just do not belong,
and suffering jabs with its prong, my spirit as it binds.

With morality so badly swirled,
the plan has long since been unfurled,
but I still struggle through this world, my soul it still confines.

My mind is in such disarray,
I know that soon will come the day
when I will stand and have to pay for all my life's designs.

So while I search for my salvation,
I scream in silent desperation,
with all the years of trepidation my spirit still declines.

And so I sense the end is near,
my destiny is still unclear,
but I am bound by all my fear, Lord, help me break these vines.


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Jan Ackerson 11/28/05
Wow! I loved the rhyme scheme here, and your word choices, and the message is GREAT! Definitely a huge favorite for me this week.
David Story11/29/05
Not sure what to say, except that I was moved.
Thanks.
Anita Neuman11/30/05
This has got to be a winner. Absolutely brilliant!!! Easy to read (the rhythm is perfect) and yet so much depth. Congratulations!!!
Nina Phillips11/30/05
Your poem has much to say, and offer. Deeply felt--and I loved the last few lines. Lord, help break these vines.
God bless ya, littlelight
Janice Stotz12/01/05
I am so impressed by good poetry, and this was very good!! God Bless you and your writing!
Linda Watson Owen12/04/05
Beautifully written! Word choice, rhythm, tone combine to make sheer poetry!
Dan Louise Mann12/05/05
Congratulations on your win this week. Kudos to you!
Brandi Roberts12/05/05
I'm only guessing that you're some relative of Kyle Chezum... but that's not what I'm here to say: THIS WAS ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL! Man, oh, man I wish I could write like this! INCREDIBLE!
DeAnna Brooks12/05/05
Powerful imagery. I was especially drawn to the powerful truth in the phrase all my life's designs. It's difficult to lay down the architect's pencil, and sumbit my life the design of One Who laid the very foundations of the world. How awesome, knowing He paid, Himself, for my design, gone so astray.
Congratulations!!
Kyle Chezum12/06/05
Uncle Tim! Why didn't you tell me you were a writer? This is awesome! Way to go!
B Brenton12/06/05
Powerful words. Powerful words.
They resound. :D

Kudos.
Marilyn Schnepp 12/28/05
From one poet to another...awesome, moving, and a masterpiece of poetic words and rhythm - touching the very soul of the reader. Congratulations!
Jacquelyn Horne03/21/07
Very good poem here. Tells a story we all can relate to.
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/04/07
Tim, I know your prose is excellent, but I'm surprised you don't do poetry more often. This is outstanding.
Rita Garcia07/04/07
Brilliant!! I am so happy this was honored with an EC!
Thanks for sharing it today, I am blessed!!
Joanne Sher 07/05/07
Wow! You have range, too! I'd recommend you give another poem a try, but I'd miss your fiction! Awesome for something you put out in 30 minutes (even in 30 days!)
Julie Ruspoli07/05/07
This poem moves me in so many different ways that I am unable to put it into words. I'll just say WOW!
Brenda Welc07/09/07
Very moving poetry, nicely done for a first try!