The Official Writing Challenge
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I love the title of this piece. We don't take time to ask that question on any matter. Even when we are wrong, we always look for "who" to blame. Whereas this question will lead to self-examination and corrections. You have done a nice job.
09/12/14
You've created an interesting tale that captured my attention and held it all the way through.

Well done.

God bless~
I loved the information and the well written history of your family's dog's history. (That is probably completely not correct.)

The flavor and "smell" of the story was perfect for making it just charming.

The bible verse at the end also fit in quite nicely.
I enjoyed the beginning and couldn't help but smile as I read it. I've come across many Americans who don't clean up after dogs either. I've never been to France, but I'll take your word on it. :)

I worry that you missed the topic a bit. Although you did mention cats at the end, it felt more like an afterthought. If you haven't been to the message boards and checked out the criteria that the judges use while scoring, I'd urge you to do so. It'll help to make sure you are covering AL they look for.

YYou did have a strong beginning. The ending might have needed a bit more tweaking, but overall it left me feeling satisfied. I think you handled the transitions in a nice way and the piece is well-written. I think it will be something your family will especially treasure. Good job.
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