The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 165 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
08/21/14
Yes, and AMEN!
Loved this beautiful poem.

God bless~
08/21/14
Fun poem with a message - I like the dialogue aspect of it (going back and forth between speakers). Clever.
08/22/14
This has a clever format, a good message and covers the topic well.

Thanks for sharing.
08/26/14
I liked the way it felt like a conversation between two people. Intimate and not formal, but with a simple, strong message.
Sometimes poems are meant to be short (to short to enter). This is what I feel about this entry. You had to enlarge it. When you went this direction you changed the short format even though you kept most of the rhyming sequence.

I would have liked the same short line format of the first part. I don't know how hard that would have been to work out

I can see, though, that you did spend quality time on the rhyming words.