The Official Writing Challenge
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08/21/14
Amen! Loved this.

God bless~
08/25/14
I like how each stanza ends with an encouraging command.
I found it a bit hard to read because the rhythm seemed off. Sometimes an author can hear his own rhythm because he forces it. It helps to have someone else read it out loud. Mark where they stumble, and try to smooth out that word or phrase.
The theme was thought-provoking. Keep writing.
08/26/14
Nice! I liked how the ending line of each verse stood out.
In poetry each line doesn't have to be a sentence. This is why periods are necessary to show readers where one thought ends and the next thought begins.

I missed the periods.

We do have to be careful of the friends we choose as well as the ways of the world.

The Holy Spirit may not be leading us to be a teacher of the gospel but a humble helper to some needy person. Let the Spirit lead so we find the place he has for us.

Poetry doesn't always have to have rhyming words so I was not to concerned about the lack of them.

Your thoughts came through clearly.