The Official Writing Challenge
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08/09/14
Wonderful job of story telling here! Enjoyable, believeable, and entertaining with a good message!

Nicely done.

God bless~
08/10/14
Great use of believable dialogue. One tip that would help is to be sure and capitalize the first letter of the first word used to start another sentence of dialogue.
08/11/14
Good story telling buddy,

I would suggest that you make a new paragraph when the speaker changes.

God bless.
08/11/14
I apologize, this was to go on another challenge writing. I have been up since 4:30 am trying to catch up on reading these challenges and I pushed the next article before I wrote my comments. I will try to redeem myself.

Please forgive for mistake.
08/11/14
Outrageous! As Guy Feriri (I think that is how you spells his name) on Diners,Dives and Drive-Inns television show always says, this was just that.

I loved it. It had me hooked from the beginning.

Great dialogue.

Funny, Funny, Funny, but had a good message.

Can't wait to read your next entry.

It's a winner to me!
08/15/14
Congrats!

God bless~