The Official Writing Challenge
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05/29/14
Wow.
This was a jarring and sobering read that depicts the sacrifices made while extoling the close bonds and friendships formed while serving their country.

I thought this was a strong story that was on topic.

Even thought they didn't make it "home" -- it was comforitng to see they were HOME with the Lord...and finally at peace.

Well done!

God bless~~
05/29/14
Good read. Tough subject, but well done. It kept my attention from the start. Great title also.
God bless you.
05/29/14
I’m not one to critique, but that was an awesome story. Being a former Marine your title peaked my interest and I had to read it. Keep up the good work…Semper Fi
05/29/14
My friend, this absolutely the best story you have ever written and if it doesn't do well, I will probably go on strike for you.

This is awesome in detail made me feel like I was right in the line of that fire, fighting with them.

Great, terrific, writing here.
This is both heart wrenching and heart warming.

I was in high school during the Vietnam era and remember losing many good friends during that "conflict".

Please continue to write your military stories...this is wonderful.

Cudos to you and may God Bless and keep you. :)
05/31/14
Wow, what an account of these terrible events, yet the hope of heaven shines through to strengthen with assurance.

The Vietnam war was a tragic part of history, as every war is. I think you captured a bit of what it was like for those who were there. A very emotional time.

Keep up the great work!
This is a powerful story that brought tears to my eyes. I was quite young when Vietnam was a hot place in reality, in the news, and in people's heart. You took me back to that time when I knew something bad was going on, but wasn't sure how to define it in my young mind.

I noticed you were sometimes using periods at the end of a quote with a tagline (he said, she asked). Jan just talked about this in her thread Jan's Writing Basics on the message board. I often encourage all levels of writers to check her thread out and participate in it. Jan is great about answering everyone who posts. I can't begin to tell you how much I have learned from her. I noticed another minor mistake and that has to do with the rule of writing numerals out. Some (usually journalists) say write out the numbers up to ten. Others say up to a hundred. The most important thing is to be consistent with the rule you choose. Also you shouldn't start a sentence with numerals. Either write it out or rearrange the sentence a bit. Ex. Over 5,600 Marines...

Over all I really enjoyed your story. I think it's vital to tell the next generation about this time in our history lest we forget. You were graphic with your details which I thought was good because you were sharing the true atrocities that really happened. I also loved that you included the prayer. Many people have no idea how to pray, so I like it when an author shows them. You did a fine job with this piece.
06/05/14
With praise and thanks to God for you, I thank you from the bottom of my heart for your service. Because of you we are free.
06/05/14
Robert,

Congratulations on your well-deserved HC!!!

I feel as if I've won the biggest prize of all...seeing your name amongst the winners has virtually made my day!

Great job!!!!!

Keep them coming!

God bless you~
06/05/14
I knew this one was a winner! Great writing here, and Congrats! So Happy for you.

Blessings, Lynn
Way to go, Robert!!!

I loved this story and you deserved to be among the winners.

Keep it up my friend! I am so very proud of you and so very excited for you, too.

Can't wait to read the next one. :)

God Bless