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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Bestie (05/22/14)

TITLE: The Lunch Break
By Milly Born
05/26/14


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“Don’t you even think about it.” Sarah increased her walking pace.

“But it’s just a lunch!”

“No Christy, it isn’t. It’s the beginning of the end of your marriage.”

“I thought you’d be happy for me. I really need some distraction. It’s so tense at home.”

“I know it is, honey. But trying to feel better by going out with another man won’t solve anything.”

The young women sauntered around the park, which offered a welcome change from their stuffy office. Sarah heard Christy take a deep breath. The fresh air seemed to instigate her friend’s agitation.

“You don’t know what I have to go through every day. When Harry comes home, he barely greets me. He slumps on the couch, switches on the TV, and waits for his dinner. As if I haven’t worked all day too!”

“Christy, you know that he’s having a tough time at work, with all these layoffs. He’s probably about to collapse under the weight of the mortgage. Maybe he’s depressed, but I’m sure he loves you.”

“Well, I don’t feel it. I wonder if he even sees me.” She kicked at a stone. “Unlike your and Brad’s, our marital ship doesn’t sail tranquil waters. We’re navigating stormy weather and sometimes I feel we’re on the brink of sinking.”

“Maybe you should ask for help to get through this storm.”

“You’re not talking about going to church, are you?”

Sarah hesitated. “Well, it isn’t really joining a church I’m thinking of. But there’s this course which…”

“No. I won’t go to any church. Listen Sarah, I appreciate your friendship, but I don’t share your beliefs. Please respect that.”

Sarah looked at her friend and noticed her clenched jaws. Jesus, help me to find the right words to open Christy’s heart, so that You will have the opportunity to restore her marriage.

Then she heard a whisper of God. Tell her about how I helped you through your hard time.

Thank You, Lord.

As they strolled among lush greenery, the spring sun brightened their path.

“Shall we sit here?” Sarah pointed at a bench under a massive oak tree. “I’d like to tell you something.”

Visibly irritated, Christy checked her watch. “Okay. I guess we have some time before going back to work.”

Sarah’s voice wavered, but she was determined to obey God. “I never talk about it, because it isn’t relevant anymore. Anyway, our marriage wasn’t always as good as it is now. About five years ago, Brad betrayed me.”

Christy gasped. “What? Brad? The superstar husband?”

“Yes, my Brad had a relationship with another woman.” Although Sarah had forgiven him, she remembered the pain. She swallowed. “It was very difficult.”

“What did you do?”

“At first, I wanted to leave him. I felt so hurt, so humiliated. But Brad said he still loved me and asked me to forgive him.”

“Impossible!”

“I had a friend who told me about this marriage course. Brad wanted so much to try it, so at the end I agreed. God did the rest.”

“What do you mean, ‘God did the rest’? Brad betrayed you, not God!”

Sarah realized that their lunch break wouldn’t be long enough to explain everything, so she just said, “Jesus helped me to forgive Brad and began to heal my heart. And we learned to love each other all over again.”

She saw that Christy looked puzzled, so she continued, “A marriage is like a garden; if we want it to flourish and be fruitful, we need to tend it carefully. We must water, nourish, and sometimes prune the plants we want to grow. At the same time, we need to uproot the weeds that harm the garden. Although it wasn’t my fault Brad had an affair, the course helped me to see that I had forsaken my husband in other ways.”

Christy stared straight ahead. Sarah knew she had touched a chord.

“I care about you, Christy. Try it. Harry—your marriage—is worth it.”

A ray of sun penetrated the tree crown and caressed Christy’s face. She sighed.
“Okay Sarah, you win. I’ll cancel the lunch and talk with Harry about the course.”

The young women looked at each other, a little uneasily, and smiled. Then Christy reached out to hug Sarah. “My bestie.”

A bird in a bush nearby started singing.

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AUTHOR’S NOTE

To know more about the marriage course described in this story, follow this link http://www.relationshipcentral.org/marriage-course


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CD Swanson 05/29/14
Well done! I felt as if I was watching one of those great Christian movies that my hubby and I enjoy so much on TBN or UP.

I loved this well written, articulate, and powerfully expressed message and story.

Excellent work!

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/30/14
You did a great job with this piece. Right out of the gate, the conflict intrigued me and pulled me in. You do an excellent job of pacing the story. Personally I don't think you needed the line at the end with the word bestie in it. To me it felt a bit forced and I don't think you needed it because the entire story was about two best friends. You also did a wonderful job of showing the characters' emotions. It made me feel like I was right there watching it all unfold.
Larry Whittington06/01/14
Good story in conversational form.

Many might be able to relate to this for their own good. Divorce comes at such a high cost to everyone but especially any children involved. This is true even if the children become "stepchildren".

Good warning for all.
Sheldon Bass 06/03/14
I imagine the sun shone a little brighter too as that birdie started to sing. You deliver a good message here and I was caught up in the tale right away. Great entry!

Now for the sake of constant improvement...hmmm, maybe if you were to be a little more descriptive of the scene, the surroundings (The park) it might help us feel like we are there in the story with your characters. Please keep these wonderful entries coming!
CD Swanson 06/05/14
Milly,

COngratulations! I knew you'd be here!

Well done.

God bless~