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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Facepalm (05/15/14)

TITLE: Hide-and -Seek
By Phillip Cimei
05/20/14


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“1...2...3...4.......10 ready or not here I come.” I tried to imagine the excitement in my little girl's heart as I lifted my head off my forearm and peeked at her awkwardly running like a newborn deer seeking refuge. She stumbled to a conspicuous spot under the kitchen table, closed her eyes, placed her face into her hands, and in her minds eye became as invisible as a spotted fawn in tall grass.

“Come out, come out wherever you are.” Her giggles followed

“Where can she be?”

Immediately she threw her hands down, lifted up her head, and came squealing towards me.
A few hugs, some rolling on the floor together while laughing about how good a hider she was, and then she would say,” 'gain....'gain.”

“Alright one more time,” I would counter knowing that it would be three or four.

Hide-and-seek has become almost a tradition, no, a necessity between adult and child. Maybe it is the need to think there is a place of sanctuary, of safety, of mystery, or maybe anonymity. Children feel safe there--almost too safe. They don't want this game to ever end.

Oh, oh! I better watch it. I am stepping on sacred ground. The problem is that many adults grow up never letting go of the “Hide-and-Seek” mentality. Then they play it with God.

The apostle Paul said, “When I was a child, I spake as a child, I understood as a child, I thought as a child: but when I became a man, I put away childish things.” I Cor. 13:11 KJV Grow up Corinthians! God's word completely furnishes us with instructions so we can grow and mature. We have been given many examples that teach us the consequences of playing hide-and-seek with Him. Satan has a way of convincing us that God won't know, can't see, and won't find out.

We can read about two adults, ashamed, probably leaning up against a tree with faces buried in their hands, and hiding from God, “......Adam and his wife hid themselves from the presence of the Lord God amongst the trees of the garden.” Gen 3:8 KJV

Are you kidding me? What were they thinking? They had intimate, audible conversations with God. They thought they could become invisible to His all seeing eyes, “Can any hide himself in secret places that I shall not see him? Saith the Lord.....” Jeremiah 23:24KJV

David and Bathsheba, the Children of Israel, Judas, and Ananias and Sapphira, the list goes on and on. We read about them, and we laugh to ourselves saying, “ If I had lived during their time, a time of miracles, the sea parting, the dead being raised, and Jesus walking on water, I wouldn't have played that game of hide-and-seek with God. Wrong! We all are subject to the wiles of the devil. We all do stupid things that we regret.

I can still picture Tom Hanks, as Forest Gu-ump, sitting stoic--in a comedic way-- on that bench telling his stories. In one of his tales, he speaks those timeless words, “Momma says, Stupid is as Stupid does.” And then I remember me sitting on the bed with my face in my hands realizing that Satan had handed me a golden platter full of lust, and for dessert, a nice bowl of “Stupid”. I hid from God, his many warnings about the lust of the eyes, his teaching on temptations, and his way of escape.

I grew up wanting a Corvette. My teen age friends had one, a '56., “62 red convertible, and a '65 2+2 coupe; I could have bought a '67 for $3200. But, I got married, had seven children and struggled for 40 years. Then, lust entered my heart; a scam artist with his fake Ebay ad made me loose sight of God's many red flag warnings. I hide under the cloak of my lust for a pretty car. An expensive lesson was learned. Don't play hide and seek with God. Don't think you can escape his watchful eye.


If we make a bonehead mistake, like I did , we shouldn't bury our heads in our hands thinking God doesn't know. We beat on our chest and say, “God be merciful to me a sinner.” We confess our sins because he is faithful and just to forgive us of our sins. We put away our childish toys and our childish games.

My advise for everyone, “Come out, come out wherever you are”.


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Camille (C D) Swanson 05/22/14
Fun, creative and well done.

God bless~
Milly Born 05/25/14
A lovely story and a good lesson--my favorite format of Bible study.

I’m a beginner too, but somehow it’s easier to see the points of improvement in other people’s writings than in my own :-)

You could make your story flow better by applying more accurate punctuation and—sometimes--use less words; “tighten up your sentences” I saw someone describing it. I recently read a very helpful blog post at FaithWriters… if you want to check it out: http://faithwriters.com/blog/2014/05/23/words-on-display/

We’re here to grow!
Judith Gayle Smith05/26/14
Delightful. You won't be a beginner long. Your writing style is deliciously animated.
Joe Moreland05/27/14
The narrative of this devotion is terrific, and the message is one of the most vital we will ever hear.

I love your ending: "Come out, come out, wherever you are!"

Surely that is God's call to all of us.

Great job!
Trudy Newell05/29/14
Most the things I saw have already been commented on. I'll just tell you the good things I saw.

You have the makings of a great writer!

I enjoy the whole thing. and really got the message!

I loved the phrases you used - " the Hide and Seek" mentality.

..."then Satan handed me a golden platter full of lust, and for dessert, a nice bowl of "Stupid."

"We put away our childish toys and our childish games."

Most of all I love you ending "Come out, come out wherever you are."

I'm a beginner too, and it helps to see how others are growing as writers. Thanks for this!

God bless - Trudy
Camille (C D) Swanson 05/29/14
Congratulations!

God bless~
Sheldon Bass 05/29/14
Ooh I missed this one earlier. Good Job! Congratulations!