The Official Writing Challenge
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05/22/14
Oh, I really enjoyed this clever and well written story. Great message too!

God bless~
05/23/14
Very well written, I could see the scene as if I was there. I could almost smell dinner cooking. Yes, our kids and grandkids do need fine tuning from time to time, and can be a definite source of embarrassment (usually at the worst possible time).
05/24/14
Very descriptive story that invites us into your setting, and leads up to the kind of credible close that strikes a chord with all of us. Well done.
05/24/14
You set the scene well, establish your characters solidly and show better than you tell. All very good qualities.

I particularly like how you tied it all together with the positive and slightly embarrassing side effects of having a child who always speaks their mind (I've got a few of those).

You did a great job with this entry, it kept me interested to the end.

Thanks for sharing.
05/24/14
You did a great job on this. I could relate to kids "telling all".

A delightful entry.

God bless - Trudy
I really enjoyed this story, beginning to the end, where
you tied a bow of humor on it.
Your message on teaching your children honesty was excellently done.
It is a shame when a writer grabs my heart and humbles me. You won't be a "beginner" long. Excellent.
Nice article. I enjoyed reading it.
05/27/14
Quite brilliant development of your MC. The conversation came across very believable and the reaction of the daughter at the dinner table brought back some memories.

Blessings.
05/28/14
Splendiferous! For some odd reason I'm really hungry now :-)
You did an excellent job of pulling me into the story. And you chose something I think every parent has experienced: the honesty of a child to the point of embarrassment at times. This should do really well. I look forward to your next entry too.
05/29/14
Congratulations!
God bless~
05/29/14
I had a feeling... Congratulations on a great piece and a fine 1st.
Congratulations on ranking 1st in your level and 20 overall! The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.
05/30/14
Hi Milly -

I was about to send you a critique, but I don't think it's necessary. Congratulations on your well deserved win.

Seriously, this was so well written. I'll look forward to reading your other entries.

God bless
06/07/14
A very nicely written story. I especially liked your term 'evaporating experience' which sums up the dreaded meltdown perfectly.

Congratulations on your first place level win.