The Official Writing Challenge
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05/22/14
Well done!

Good message and well written.

God bless~
05/23/14
Very well done. Nicely presented with a great message.
05/24/14
I could see the weary men and feel their dejection.

Nice entry. I'm sure there are times when the Lord does get exasperated with us, too!!

Keep writing. Trudy
05/28/14
Point made! It is only by faith. Your ending was a bit unexpected, which is a good thing. One suggestion though. You might try revisiting the story line at the very end to bring your point home better. Rather than talking to the reader, have one of your characters give the message. Just a thought. You have definite talent and I hope to read more of your work in the future. Blessings!
05/29/14
Congratulations!
God bless~
05/29/14
Congratulations on winning second place in your level! Kudos!
06/01/14
You've captured the atmosphere very well, and your points are quite valid. Congratulations on your placing; you're on the rise.