The Official Writing Challenge
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04/24/14
Clever and well done. Good message at the end, although labeled "fiction" a lot of truth resonates throughout this piece.

God bless~
04/24/14
Interesting take on this week's topic. We really do rely on our cars a little too much...even when we're going short distances. Good job.
04/25/14
A very good lesson to learn! More of us need to walk more to avoid health problems. This was an easy read that flowed very well. The only red ink I might add, is to maybe emphasize Bob's character a little more instead of Laura's details. Great job though!

I liked how you took one story and turned it into two.

Good work.

It may not be a worldwide problem but it is a US problem. Each of us can be reminded of this.

Our abundance should be for sharing and not for our "waist".
04/27/14
A good story with a lot of truth in it. I would like to have seen the story told more through the dialogue and less narration, but that's something that comes with practice. So keep up the good work!