The Official Writing Challenge
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03/06/14
This is beautiful!! Great job...I enjoyed every bit of it!
03/07/14
Poetic and oh so lovely!

God bless~
This was easy to read. I would, though, put a blank line between every 4 lines.

The rhyming words were well chosen but did not seem forced.

Good conclusion.

Nice work.
I'm not always a huge poetry fan, but I did like this. It had a strong message. As humans we tend to worry, but like you point out so nicely, we are worrying about the wrong thing. If God thought we could handle knowing just when, he would have told us. You did a nice job. Check out Jan's Writing Basics on the message boards. She has great advice and answers each post personally. This week she is discussing endings and a few weeks ago, she did a bit on writing poems. You definitely nailed the topic and did a nice job. I look forward to reading more of your work.