The Official Writing Challenge
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02/27/14
A very cute out of the box entry featuring the story of Mary & Martha in a clever and uniq
02/27/14
Oops! Sorry, I inadvertently hit the send button!

Anyhow, here is my comment in its entirety!

A very cute out of the box entry featuring the story of Mary & Martha in a clever and unique story, that had a little bit of everything to offer.

Nicely done!

God bless~
03/01/14
Creative take on an often told Bible story. Ordering fast fish by camel - who would-a thunk? Haha! Good job!
03/03/14
This is such a fun approach to the biblical account and thoughtful too!

I have one recommendation though. Placing a space between your paragraphs makes it easier to read and more visually pleasing too.

You wrote: "And no, things were not perfect, but they didn't have to be." This is so true! What a great lesson for all of us. And I love it that Mary does the clean up!
A good story to remind us that some things just have to come first.

I could feel the internal pressure build with each "Chop". A nice way to help us feel how it built up.

Divide the paragraphs using an extra blank space between them will help me read them easier.

I also like how you put yourself as Martha and told what you were doing while Mary was with Jesus.

Nicely done.
03/06/14
Congratulations!

God bless~