The Official Writing Challenge
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11/21/05
A few easy edits would make this piece really stand out. Change the references to "you" in the first paragraph to "I", and change the exclamation points to periods, for example. I really liked reading about the contrasts in your experiences with the weather.
11/22/05
Made me think of moving to hot florida!Nice image of the contrast and carrying our weather with us...I liked that.
11/22/05
I enjoyed reading your contrasting thoughts, and conclusion. Thank you for sharing! God bless ya, littlelight
11/25/05
I just Love This:
ďall have to carry our weather with us, whether itís sunny and hot or its winter and chilly all the glory belongs to God who made them all.Ē ďAll the glory belongs to God who made them allĒ Amen.
A Wonderful written piece. Thanks for sharing. God Bless, Helen