The Official Writing Challenge
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11/21/05
I really liked your first two paragraphs. You painted a vivid word picture without getting overly adjective-happy: not an easy thing to do! I wonder if you might try a re-write where you continue in the same way: describing the gradual thawing of the village--then letting your readers grasp the analogy more subtly. You're obviously a good writer!
11/21/05
I liked your analogy and descriptive portrayal between our hearts and the village. Nice work. God bless ya, littlelight
11/21/05
Your article was touching a good remind to gard our heart and look to Jesus so our hearts won't become hard. Thank you!
11/24/05
A good devotional. Placeing the spacing between the paragraphs would make it read some better.
11/26/05
I Love this Descriptive part:
“Skin cracks as the dry, arctic air moves in from the north. Snow piles up on the sides of houses deep enough to swallow entire cars.” I feel so cold.
“Winter should be a time for reflection, not just for the frosty storms to ice us over and hibernate our walk with God. Although it’s cold outside, our hearts need to stay warm and inviting. After all, God’s heart is always inviting us; to stay.”
Wonderfully said. Thank you. Helen