The Official Writing Challenge
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01/23/14
Important truths brought to the fore here. I wonder if it could be whittled down a bit, and have an even greater impact? Sometimes in writing, less is really more. Just something to think about. As you have demonstrated, its good writing practice to write everything down on topic as you have, and then beyond that, what I find helpful is to do the "chop, chop" - weeding out words or phrases that tend to be redundant or unneeded to make a point. Readers appreciate a writer's careful rationing of words when it means an easier follow through with a greater impact at the end.
01/24/14
Thank you for sharing your story. It was authentic and straight from your heart.

God bless~
01/25/14
Wow! Thanks for your testimony. Congratulations on a job well done. Just one question - what are you doing in the Beginner category!!

God bless.
01/25/14
Your storyline is really good drawing us to the One who is our Need Meeter.

I noticed quite a few grammar and punctuation errors and want to let you know about the forums here at FW's (if you don't know already).

Jan's Writing Basics and Ann's Grammar Basics are there. They are very helpful and willing to help us all become better writers.

I encourage you to take some time and read some of the posts.

All in all, it was a great story and thanks for sharing!

01/27/14
You've got a lot of great ideas here and I like the way you tie them all together, reminding us in the end to trust in Christ. Nice work.