The Official Writing Challenge
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01/23/14
I really enjoyed this story with a meaningful devotional tied in. Great job! P.S. Did you mean to say you moved to George in the beginning of the piece?
01/24/14
This is excellent material and covers the topic well. Your message too, came through clearly. You have a wonderful gift for writing.

That said, I hope to see you continue to grow as a writer and hone these skills. One thing we talk about a lot is showing us the story instead of telling the story.

For example, when the king-size bed and all the other unexpected things were seen, would have been a great place to describe the surprize and elation on faces and body postures. (eyes bulge, a hand clamps over a mouth, a mouth gapes open in shock, etc.)Rather than telling it was surprizing, show it.

I sometimes still struggle with this myself, but it comes with practice. I am eagerly anticipating your next entry!

Keep up the good work.
01/24/14
Loved it! Excellent job with the topic at hand, and one of my favorite pieces of scripture--Proverbs 3:5-6--so it made it even better for me.

Nicely done!

God Bless~
A delightful testimony. Thanks for sharing these words of encouragement.
Very nice writing for Level 1! Other than a few mis-spelled words (George for Georgia and boarder for border) I thought your story was delightful!

It's always a great idea to use a spell checker and really scrutinize your writing before submitting it!

Thanks for sharing!
01/27/14
A very interesting story. I like how you started with a "close-up" of a not-so-simple project, gave the background, and wove in the entire faith aspect. Excellent work.
01/27/14
Thanks for all your helpful comments.

Wendy, I apologize again for the mix up. I'm embarrassed - and mentioned the wrong article. However, your thoughts were very helpful. I trust they will help me to grow as a writer.
01/30/14
Congrats!!!

God bless~