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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Day's End (01/01/14)

TITLE: "Sacred Moments"
By Robb Shultz
01/07/14


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"Sacred Moments"

Alone except for my friend, "The Silence"
I reflect upon my day.
Hours filled with the noise of work,
"A good thing", some would say.

At last the moments I cherish most,
Peace and time to pray.
I listen for the smallest sounds
Both near and far away.

And then it comes, the gentle "ping";
A single, soulful raindrop may
Have touched upon my window sill,
Inviting me to play.

His friends join in to tap the roof
With a medley and lyrics too.
They begin to sing a brand new song
Arriving right on cue.

Some percuss against the roof
While others find the vents.
Others join to rap the doors
To signify their presence.

As tempo and the volume grow
The song becomes a chorus.
Falling drops on this and that
Create a melodic focus.

The song is now a symphony,
No wait, it's so much more:
A cantata of simple, sacred sounds,
A heavenly music score.

And now it tapers down the scale
To let the others in.
The sound of rain against the plants
Inhabiting my garden.

Then as subtly as these drops appeared
They begin to fade away.
And I am left with sweet memories
Of a wondrous end to day.


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Jody Day 01/09/14
Lovely poem and nice treatment of the theme. Good job!
Jody Day 01/09/14
Beautiful poem and a nice treatment of the theme. Good job!
Jan Ackerson 01/09/14
As a Level 1 writer, you might not be aware of the free writing lessons available on the FaithWriters forums. This week’s lesson is on writing devotionals, and next week will cover writing on topic for the weekly challenge. Look for it at http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewforum.php?f=67, or if you’re on Facebook, you can “like” Faithwriters Writing Lessons. I’d love to have your input into the conversation there!
CD Swanson 01/10/14
Touching and lovely sentiments throughout this poem. Thank you.

God bless~
Larry Whittington01/10/14
Alovely piece describing the coming and going of a shower.

"A Silence" is "the Rests" that hold the music together and make it come alive.

You did some research on music or have had some training in it.

I can hear the shower coming and going.
Jan Ackerson 01/11/14
There is lovely imagery in this charming poem. I enjoyed it tremendously.
Amelia Brown 01/12/14
Makes me feel like dancing in the rain!

At firt I thought the focus was on quite times with God, but then the focus shifted to rain. Or could it be a combination of both? That part for me is a little confusing.

Nevertheless, a lovely poem. Your rhymes were well thought out.
Dusty Fontaine 01/13/14
"Be still, and know that I am God." Listening to rain when all else is quiet can be a spiritual blessing. Nice job with your poem. A couple of the rhyming lines had different syllable counts which caused me to read them twice to find the rhythm, otherwise, very good. I enjoyed it.
Sheldon Bass 01/13/14
Wonderful poem that made me want to get out there and dance among the drops. Good rhymes, and it offered a simplistic, yet exuberant joy. Can't wait for the next one!
Wendy B McLain 01/15/14
I love poetry! I love to read it and I love to write it! This poem was beautiful! I would have expected to find this in a higher level than beginner. Great job! Thanks for sharing.
Wendy B McLain 01/15/14
I love poetry! I love to read it and I love to write it! This poem was beautiful! I would have expected to find this in a higher level than beginner. Great job! Thanks for sharing.
Amelia Brown 01/16/14
Congrats!!!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/16/14
Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level and 28 overall! (The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.)