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I especially liked the verses that had a steady rhythm. It takes a lot of work to get this as well as the rhyming.

I was a little lost at the meaning at the last verse but I am not always best with poetry.
12/14/13
Some poetry has deeper meaning than what most readers can decipher, and I take that to be the case here.
I found your lines to be steeped in obscurity. I did enjoy this poem. Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing!
12/16/13
This is a good aabb poem. The rhymes are excellent, the meter and flow is a little off, but it tells a good story. Try working on your syllable count a little more closely.

This is good, though, so keep writing. When I came in here, my poems were a lot like this. Blessings!
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Hebrews 10:26-31 KJV
Great poem! Congratulations on your well-deserved win!

Love & Hugs in, through and because of Jesus, the Christ,

Judi Hebrews 10:26-31 KJV
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