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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Elephant in the Room (12/05/13)

TITLE: A star'y night....
By Jason Smith
12/11/13


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Emma was mesmerized by the blanket of stars in the summer nights sky. Comfortably sprawled out on her Mom's Yellow and white plaided blanket in her grassy back yard, she could stare at the shimmering stars all night and just dream, while enjoying the crisp summer breeze. Her mind often drifted off to her Dad's Bible stories about Moses or Jesus and at times on Disney movies like The Lion King or Finding Nemo, but this time it took a whole new approach. She started pondering on the homeless woman they seen at McDonald's earlier in the day and all the people that walked by her with no regard, like she didn't exist. She so badly wanted to ask her parents about her, but opted to quietly eat her sausage mcmuffin instead and it was obvious the whole family peered her direction from time to time, but nobody said a word. 'What if that was me?' Emma thought.

Emma's vivid imagination, took her back to McDonald's and briefly put her in the homeless women's shoes. '"Sir can I have some change?" Why does everybody ignore me? The hunger is painful and I smell horrid. Wheres my family or friends? This family looking at me, why don't they say hi or give me some food or change? I need help and nobody is helping or even know I'm here. How am I going to survive? Where am going to sleep? I am not loved. Life is meaningless. I want to die.' That was all she could take, the imagination was a lot more real then expected as she snapped back to reality with uncontrollable tears flowing down her flushed cheeks. She then thought about the thousands upon millions of homeless people around the world and her heart crumbled as she cried "Why don't you do anything God!?"

A still small voice deep in her heart replied "Look." She looked again at the beautiful array of countless stars, as her memory brought her back to her Dad's story about God promising Moses that he would have more children then the stars in the sky. She remembered asking her Dad how that could be. Her Dad explained to her about how Moses believed God and God accounted that as being righteous. He then went onto tell her about Jesus Christ. He started with the virgin birth and continued through his death on the cross, to the resurrection. He continued to tell her that if we believed and accepted Jesus into our hearts, we would not only be children of moses, but children of God and part of the body of Christ.

The memories and thoughts continued to flood in, it reminded her of Dory gaining her memory in Finding Nemo, at lightning quick speeds it was all starting to come together. Emma suddenly realized she had her answer. 'God has already provided us with everything. We are his hands and his feet, sent into the world to spread his light. It is my responsibility to make a change and allow God to flow through me.' The revelation hit her like a ton of bricks as she popped up off the ground and started to run, determined to change the world.


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Larry Whittington12/12/13
The invisible elephant was seen.

Nicely written story.

Check you work for works that needed capitals and apostrophes.

Innocence is seen in Emma.

When she would be of age to obey what Peter commanded in Acts 2 she would be baptized or the forgiveness of her sin and receive the gift of the Holy Spirit. I could see her living out her Christianity by helping the homeless.
Sheldon Bass 12/16/13
A realistic story, and one that most Christians have experienced. We are to carry on Jesus' ministry and heart to the poor of this world, as His hands and feet. Thank you for sharing this. Can't wait to read your next entry!
lynn gipson 12/16/13
A great story is told here. Some SPAG and punctuation errors and the paragraphs are a little long, but all in all it grabbed and kept my attention. I liked the fact she put herself in the homeless woman's shoes. I enjoyed this. Keep writing!
Judith Gayle Smith12/16/13
Powerful and compassionate! I love your summation. . .

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