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The invisible elephant was seen.

Nicely written story.

Check you work for works that needed capitals and apostrophes.

Innocence is seen in Emma.

When she would be of age to obey what Peter commanded in Acts 2 she would be baptized or the forgiveness of her sin and receive the gift of the Holy Spirit. I could see her living out her Christianity by helping the homeless.
12/16/13
A realistic story, and one that most Christians have experienced. We are to carry on Jesus' ministry and heart to the poor of this world, as His hands and feet. Thank you for sharing this. Can't wait to read your next entry!
12/16/13
A great story is told here. Some SPAG and punctuation errors and the paragraphs are a little long, but all in all it grabbed and kept my attention. I liked the fact she put herself in the homeless woman's shoes. I enjoyed this. Keep writing!
Powerful and compassionate! I love your summation. . .

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