The Official Writing Challenge
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12/12/13
Short, spicey, & whimsical. I love it.
A cute "could be real story". I don't know the affects of weather and breathing in Florida so I just took them as facts that added interest.

You used the topic well and placed it in the story in a strategic place.

Good writing
12/13/13
This is a very good story here. Breaking it into paragraphs would make it easier to read, but a very original take on the topic!

Keep writing.
Delightful, engrossing. . .

Please "throw a brick" for others to enjoy, comment and support your writing:

http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?f=56&t=37705

Hebrews 10:26-31 KJV
12/17/13
As a dog lover and dog trainer, I love dog stories! Thank you for sharing! Yes, break up your paragraphs. Keep submitting, please!