The Official Writing Challenge
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Your introductory paragraph introduced the theme of choices. This was then carried throughout your piece. This shows good continuity.

We are responsible for our own choices.

One of the longer paragraphs could have been made into possible two or three paragraphs for greater emphasis.

Keep writing about these ideas.

11/23/13
Great job with a running profound commentary that brings a clear and concise message forward.

Nicely done.

God bless~