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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Beautiful (11/07/05)

TITLE: The Eyes of Love
By Kell-Ann Hoyte
11/14/05


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Dear Diary

I am on cloud nine! I met Ken tonight and…you guessed it…he was great. Beth didn’t lie, he is positively dreamy. At first I wondered what he thought of me, this being a blind date and all and I was so nervous! I knocked over my water glass and made a real mess trying to clean it up but he was real nice about it. I wanted to die but he just laughed and it kind of broke the ice between us. After that we just talked and talked and talked. He has a great sense of humour and the cutest smile. All my worries over what he thought of me evaporated because he made me feel special and beautiful without really saying anything. I think this could be the one.

Lily


Dear Diary

I had the most beautiful wedding. And honeymoon! God has really blessed me. I really love this man. We both cried during the ceremony. I think almost everyone else did too. Ken, ahem, my husbandsaid I was the most beautiful bride he’d ever seen. I am going to be the best wife to him.

Lily


Dear Diary

I feel so vain. I know I shouldn’t worry about this. The doctor said it would only be temporary, anyway. Thank God the treatments are working, although I feel so tired all the time. I can’t wait for all this to be over. Ken is being his usual great self. The darling, he’s bought me a new scarf practically every week and is so great with the kids. He asked me today what’s bothering me (I swear he knows me almost as well as I know myself) but I don’t think even he can understand how I feel about this.

Lily


Ken slowly closed the book. He knew he should feel some guilt over this invasion of privacy but he wasn’t sorry. He just wanted to know how to help his wife. He’d known she was holding back something but she just wouldn’t say. Now he knew what he had to do.


Three hours later …

Ken walked in the door. His heart was racing and his palms felt clammy. He hoped he had done the right thing. Please God let it be the right thing.

He set off in search of his wife. He found her in the laundry room carefully folding clothes. Her back was to him and she didn’t hear him approach.

“Hey,” he said encircling her waist from behind and kissing her on the cheek.

“You’re home” she began, “I wanted – ” turning around, she stopped short, her jaws gaping open. “What -, you-?” Coherence eluded her at that moment. Ken saw her mouth and close and realization dawn in her eyes. Then she began to laugh and cry at the same time.

Ken passed his hands over his shaven head. “You like?”

“Yes, I definitely like” Lily replied, pulling his bald head down for a kiss. Laying her head on his shoulder, she commented, “You really have to stop reading my mind.”

“About that,” Ken began, “I have a confession to make.”


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Cassie Memmer11/15/05
So sweet! Very touching too. This could be expanded into a longer story sometime. You've done well!
terri tiffany11/15/05
Oh I loved this so much! MAde me choke up. I was surprised at the ending and was so pleased by it too. I like how you started with her diary. This one was really special. Thanks.
Jeffrey Snell11/15/05
Very good job! Nice touch not giving the POV until later. Touching, and a good job not over-telling the story.
Pat Guy 11/16/05
Wow This was great! So well told! *clap, clap*
Anita Neuman11/16/05
Yes, very good job saving the POV 'til half-way through. And a delightful ending. Great job on this!
Laurie Glass11/16/05
Wow. I love the story and how you put it together. Bravo.
Lynda Lee Schab 11/17/05
Well crafted and well written piece. Cute story - a real heart warmer. Creative "Beautiful" entry.
Blessings, Lynda
Debbie OConnor11/18/05
Cute, sweet! Brought tears to my eyes!
Val Clark11/20/05
Delightful story. Glad he fessed up. If you expanded this it would be interesting to now how much of a sacrifice it was for Ken to shave his head. Yeggy
Dan Louise Mann11/21/05
Congratulations on your well-deserved win this week. Well constructed with a nice surprise ending. Kudos!
Helen Harris11/21/05
Congratulations on your Sweet win. A Sweet written story “The Eyes of Love” Thanks for sharing. Helen