The Official Writing Challenge
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11/04/13
This is a good analogy. I'm wondering if you ever confessed.
11/04/13
Oh this was excellent! Although I'm sorry to have learned the goldfish died...it was a powerful segue into a prolific message. The part of Satan wanting to take us "out of the pond and expose us" was nothing short of brilliant.

Very well done!!

God Bless~


"Oh and perhaps that wasn't your fault with the goldfish. Maybe the little guy was older than you thought!"
11/04/13
This is a very good piece. I like the transitions made, it allowed the story to flow; and the ending was tied in nicely. Well done. Keep writing.
11/07/13
Congratulations! God Bless~