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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Like a Fish Out of Water (10/24/13)

TITLE: Condemnation choked by Grace’s presence
By Maretha Retief


I cannot breathe, Your presence are suffocating me. Wherever You are, I am not welcome. I have to face rejection every time in the approach of those who believe in You.

You bring deliverance to every stronghold I place on the mind. You turn the ashes I leave behind into beauty in Your presence. You bring rest where I encourage effort. You take away all the focus from me, when you make people rest at Your feet. You remind them of the gift there is in You and what do they do to me? They disregard me, because they know the truth—I have no way in their lives when You are there.

I swim in the sea of sin and self-condemnation, I dwell in its presence and whenever the opportunity arises, I remind my prisoners of what they have done wrong. As long as I can keep them in the lie that they have to earn their redemption, the more grounds I have to attack and convict them. Oh what an easy task I have to do, until You come along…

The gift of Grace … I can even manipulate this truth if I can convince people that grace is a thing, but once they grip the truth of Grace as a Person, who died and raised from the dead for their eternal deliverance and life of rest in victory, I am choked with the dryness of their unconsciousness of their sin. No more water for me to swim in, no more lies for me to play with. Just dry ground covered in the Light of the truth in which they dwell in Your presence.

My criticism turns out to be bleak and the only result I get from it is to realise the defeated life I have—condemned to lies and death. A life overshadowed by Your elegance and charm, You polish every rough edge I try to create to complete smoothness. You make Your people shine so that all the world can see is a mirror image of You in them. Oh, how I envy You? I cannot help myself but desire to be as one of You. Irrespective of my life, You still love me, but I admit, I am destined to fight You. As long as there is a sea of depression, guilt and self-righteousness, I will have water to move in.

One thing I know, where You are, I am like a fish out of water—completely removed from my breath of life and exposed to the sting of defeat!

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C D Swanson 11/04/13
Wow - This was a brilliant piece and approach to the topic at hand! The enemy's POV and internal dialogue is powerful while providing a huge messge.

Excellent piece, I really thought this clever and well done.

God bless~
Amelia Brown 11/04/13
Hummme, a fresh perspective. We are hearing the other side of the story; hearing from the devil/sin.... Sharing with us his defeat. Very nicely written, well done.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/08/13
Congratulations on placing 6th in your level! (the highest rankings can be found on the message boards)
Toni Babcock 01/04/14
Wow, I really loved this piece because it is so absolutely true as to how the enemy works on our minds and hearts, as well as through false teachers who attempt to bring people back under the condemnation of the works of the law but don't really preach the gospel of grace in the finished work of Christ. Creative use of point of view - keep writing - you could write a whole book of pieces like this from the enemy's standpoint.