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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Curiosity Killed the Cat (10/10/13)

TITLE: Through, Up, and Over Fences
By Victoria Catron
10/16/13


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My three brothers and me
Were often plagued with curiosity!
Our mother told us to stay in the yard,
But that was sometimes way too hard!
Being at home was not our foe.
There were antique cars in a row.
There was a wood pile out back.
There were tires upon tires in a stack.
Yet at times across the fields we did roam,
Though not too far away from home.

Through, up and over fences we went.
We were being disobedient.
A very large, wooden barn was next door.
It must have had at least two floors.
Inside were remnants of a vibrant farm life,
And two large barn owls gave our hearts some strife.
Through and around the back of it we did go
To meet face to face with a brick silo.
It towered far above our height.
A hole in its side came into sight.
We wondered at what used to be
And moved onto the next thing with glee.
An old ranch house made of brick and wood,
From our investigation, still looked quite good.
It might not have had real windows.
The animals in it were our foes.
So kick out the little mouse!
It could become our clubhouse!
We never did use it
Because to another adventure we did flit!

Through, up, and over fences we went.
We did well at being disobedient.
It wasn't long until we found
A large crack in the ground.
We climbed down the gulley wall.
There were grasses and trees that were tall.
In the very bottom was a creek.
We were so excited we didn't really speak.
A lizard slithered away.
A bird screeched to keep us at bay.
We made a dam using some rocks.
Later it tumbled down with a few knocks.
We saw the bones of a horse
And didn't dare touch them, of course!
They were stuck in the dirt
Where the neighbor's old pet had fallen and got hurt.
Walking on we found an irrigation water inlet.
Investigation of it would happen another time, I bet.
Weeks, months, a year or two had passed by then
And at least one of my sisters could join in.
On a hot summer day we were sliding and slipping.
Going down the wet incline my brother's shorts were ripping!
We went back more than once.
These are some of my childhood treasure hunts!

It may be true that curiosity killed the cat,
But for me God was at bat!
He does love, save, grow, and protect me
And will do so throughout eternity.
He's forgiving, patient, faithful, and kind.
He gets me out of unknown binds!
Through, up, and over fences I still go
But hopefully more often with God's flow.
I don't want to be disobedient
But rather have God's light shining radiant!


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CD Swanson 10/21/13
Thanks for sharing your "adventures" in your entry that was on topic as I see it.

I enjoyed the read and loved the wrap-up with your important message.

NIcely done.

God bless~
Yvonne Blake 10/21/13
I like the repeated title throughout this narrative poem. I had to laugh at the antics.

As a rhyming poem, it would flow better if each pair of lines had a matching number of syllables. I think this might be better as a story with one or two substories of your adventures.

Keep writing!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/23/13
This is a fun take on the topic. You do a nice job with your rhymes. I cringed a few times at me instead of I and got instead of gotten, but realized those choices were important to the rhyme pattern. So I understand it. :) Be careful about overusing exclamation points, instead let your excellent selection of words do your exclaiming for you. You covered the topic in a totally different way. I really enjoyed it. Nice job.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/23/13
This is a fun take on the topic. You do a nice job with your rhymes. I cringed a few times at me instead of I and got instead of gotten, but realized those choices were important to the rhyme pattern. So I understand it. :) Be careful about overusing exclamation points, instead let your excellent selection of words do your exclaiming for you. You covered the topic in a totally different way. I really enjoyed it. Nice job.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/24/13
Congratulations on placing 6th in your level! (the highest rankings can be found on the message board)