The Official Writing Challenge
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Great advice and beautiful message in your entry.

Thanks. God bless~
Thank you for reminding me to think of my husband more often. After a marriage of 46 years, I tend to slow down with the loving comments.

Also, look at your passive sentences..."was searching,..was eager,..was leaving"...and try to re-arrange them.

Thanks...great job!
Congratulations for ranking 6th in your level! (The highest rankings can be found on the message boards)
This is a lovely devotion. You do a nice job of pulling the reader into your world.

I noticed some tiny things that a good proofreader might spot. Your last sentence in the first paragraph is incomplete. You could fix it by adding the word, it. I also noticed you used gait instead of gate. Also when writing for an online publication especially, it helps to double space between paragraphs to give the reader that all important white space.

Overall, I think you did a fabulous job. Marriage is hard work and I could see the topic sprinkled throughout this delightful and encouraging piece. Good job!