The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved the comical segue that led to your inspiring devotional ending.

Great job. Thanks.

God bless~
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This is a great message. I really enjoyed the true life experience that pretty much everyone can relate to. It really sets up your message.

The only advice I might offer would be to use ellipses, em dashes, and exclamation points sparingly. Sometimes they can distract from your article. Also remember that an ellipsis is meant to show a trailing off or missing words in a quotation while an em dash--is more of a sudden interruption.

You did a wonderful job of transitioning to your message. By pouring milk in a glass, we can see the chunky gunk or if it's a brilliant white. Jesus can look into our hearts and see the same thing. Thankfully, his blood washes away the gunk leaving us pure white in his eyes. Beautiful devotion.