The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a charming story. The first paragraph was a bit confusing, and though I realize you were using it as an example, I think the mother daughter story is powerful by itself and doesn't need the opener. It is so true that kids watch us all the time, even when we aren't aware of it. The dialog could me tweaked a bit to sound more realistic, but you did a nice job of giving an example of example. This is something we all can learn from. Nice job.
08/04/13
This story will touch many people as they reflect and see a little bit of someone they "know" within the words.

Good interaction with the MC's, and great message.

God bless~