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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Example (07/25/13)

TITLE: That Joy
By Tracy Stevens
07/25/13


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My chin just about hit the floor. I could not believe the spirit of the young woman as she told me the end of the story! But certainly I should tell it to you from the beginning. Her brown hair fell around her face in naturally straight, but messy pieces. Her dark brown eyes danced as she spoke. She had my full attention by the end of the tale, although I can’t say that for the beginning…

“My friend left her bag at my house, so I packed it up for her in order to return it to her that night” she began. As she spoke, I lifted my French pressed coffee to my lips- inhaled the lovely hazelnut aroma, and took an indulgent sip. “We had had a disagreement over an item, and she thought it was hers, but it wasn’t. I remember buying it a few months ago. I guess she thought she left hers here at my house the last time she was here” the young woman’s brown eyes sparkled as she began to share the details of the story. I wrapped my hands around my favorite brown coffee mug; the one with the small hearts etched around the edges. I traced them mindlessly with a finger while I listened intently.

“So as I gathered her things and placed them in her bag, I noticed the item she had argued with me about was buried under a sweater in her bag!”

“She STOLE IT?!” I exclaimed, suddenly disinterested in my coffee, however delicious, setting it down on the table.

“Well, I suppose that was her intent” the young woman paused thoughtfully and a thin smile crept across her face. Her brown eyes were filled with laughter and a joy that can only be found in one place; in walking with Jesus.

My first reaction was to ask how long it took the young woman to snatch the item out of the bag indignantly, stuff her friend’s belongings into the bag, zip it with gusto and toss it into her back seat! But I hesitated. The look on her face told me there was more to the story. So, raising an eyebrow I asked, “What did you do?”

Her answer astounded me. It hit me like an unexpected pillow to the face! “Well, I just took it out,” she began; (‘yes, of course she took it out’ I thought!) “and then I found a gift bag, and a few other things that she had admired in my house, and the item she had taken, and I put them all back into her bag, and took it to her!”

See? See why my chin was dragging the ground? I very nearly knocked my coffee right off the table in shock. I had not expected that response. The young woman smiled at me, and said, “Well, that’s what Jesus would have done, Mama” and skipped off to do cartwheels. That young woman, my nine year old daughter, was the most beautiful example of Christ I had seen all week!


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Nancy Bucca 08/02/13
Wow, what a great story. I relished it from beginning to end. Still savoring it as I type this. Excellent job!
Bonnie Rose Hudson08/02/13
I loved the surprise twist at the end--warmed my heart!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/03/13
This is a sweet story and I enjoyed the twist at the end. In retrospect, some of the dialog doesn't match a 9 yo. I love having twists in my stories too and sometimes it can be hard to stay true to the character and keep the twist going. As a parent, I can totally relate to feeling humbled by my kids. Sometimes we parents can be blown away by the wonderful example our kids give us. Nice job.
CD Swanson 08/04/13
Awww. This was an adorable story that left me with a great feeling. Good job with bringing forward an important message in Jesus Christ.



God bless~
CD Swanson 08/08/13
Congratulations! God bless~