The Official Writing Challenge
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Very good break between the time-lines.

Family traditions continue. It is the children moving from home that start a new cycle.

Easy to follow story. Very good connection between the two time-lines.
07/26/13
Lovely, lovely writing. Just a few tiny proofreading errors, and perhaps slightly light on the topic, but the story itself is flawless and beautifully written.
07/29/13
Oh the smell of that bread filled my room. This is a wonderful piece of writing.

The bread expanded and so did the mc's memories. I like this a lot.

Thanks
07/30/13
I enjoyed this very much. Thanks, and keep writing!