The Official Writing Challenge
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This is really beautiful. You brought tears to my eyes as I read that. I think you did a nice job of covering the topic in a fresh way.

Some of the sentences could use a bit of tightening to help with the flow, but that will become easier with each challenge.

I really like the metaphor of the egg. I think it creates a great picture. I'm sure I'm not the only one who can see myself in your words and allow Jesus to help mold me into what he wants need to be. Great job.
Keep this as it is for comparison but I wonder what it would be like if you had used an Easter Egg. I might not get to read it but I would like to see how you would develop the same theme using an Easter Egg.

Make sure that each sentence is really adding something necessary to what you want to say.

This was a nice use of a common object to tell get your point across.
07/22/13
This is interesting and covers the topic well. You have expressed your feelings well, especially that of finding what God expects, rather than trying to live up to other expectations. Good job.
07/23/13
Love your descriptions, and your last line. This was a fabulous entry, and well done.

God bless~
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