The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a really creative and original poem. I think it would make a great story as well. I found it quite fascinating. It makes one stop and think, which is always a good thing. The only suggestion might have been to switch the second and third characters around so it ends on a more uplifting note, but idea doesn't always end on a happy note so it does have power this way, even though some may prefer a happy ending. I think you did a fabulous job of writing on topic in a fresh and creative way. This is a really powerful piece. You did a great job.
07/19/13
Very creative free verse poem and spot on the topic. Good job:)
Good understanding of what people exposed to at least part of the Bible may think, feel, or do.

All may go through each of these but, hopefully, end up like the middle section in their obedience to the truth of the Bible.

I sense you enjoyed the manipulation of the line length. That added interest because I did not know what to expect.

Keep enjoying your writing.
07/23/13
Wow - Amazingly powerful in your execution and commentary in this prolific poem. Thanks...I really enjoyed this.

God bless~