The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow this is a powerful story. You do a great job of building the suspense. I could feel my heart thumping as I read. Some of the sentences felt a tad awkward. A good way to judge this is have someone read it aloud, and if they stumble, then you may want to consider rephrasing it. Overall, though, you did an amazing job. I really liked how the teacher's mindset went to thinking Christians were hypocrites to realizing that Jesus was her saving grace. That's an important message and a good reminder for all of us to look at ourselves through the eyes of others. Your story did just that and the ending was perfect.
06/18/13
Wow! Beautiful and exciting!
This is excellently written. You set the scene and the anxiety. The topic became the miracle. Very, very well done!
It sounds like it really happened.
Incredible and awesome article.
Congratulations on placing 1st in your level and 13 overall! (The highest rankings can be found on the message boards)
06/20/13
Wonderful! congratulations on your placing, both in your level and overall. Well deserved,
06/22/13
Congratulations on your well deserved first place level win with this gripping tale that sounded so true. Well done.