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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Hum (06/06/13)

TITLE: Give Me A Song
By Cinda Carter
06/08/13


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Give me a song, to hum along.

One that makes you smile, while going the extra mile.

It puts a spring in one's step, while doing one's best.

It gives laughter, one that brings joy to the Master.

Give me a song, to hum along.

With the joy of the Lord, in hand with the sword.

In Christ there is a song, let us hum along.

Awaken the day, hum along the way.

With the rising of the sun, let's rejoice everyone.

When we face each new day, sing in a special way.

Hum, hum, hum along with a song.

We have a choice to rejoice.

Whether we have a song, or just want to hum along.

God is there and helps us to share,

His love, through Jesus above.

He brings joy to our hearts, in every morning as we start.

Looking to rejoice with gladness, to chase away the sadness.

When we draw near to our Lord, whom we adore.

Then His love shows through, as being true.

A faithful God, on our journey we trod.

Facing our trials for the day, in Jesus Christ we pray;

“Give us a song, to hum along.”


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/15/13
I really enjoyed this. It was light and breezy and I'm guessing if set to music, it would be one of those songs that gets stuck in my head. (Which is a good thing)

I'm not great at hearing rhythm and have to count out the syllables on my fingers. Most lines seemed to fit quite well as far as meter goes, but for me (and I could be totally off base on this) this line seemed twice as long as the one before: Whether we have a song, or just want to hum along.
Maybe something like this might flow better: We can choose to sing or just hum along.
I gave you the example just to try and show what I mean, but realize it's nowhere near as good as your lines.

Overall, I think it was quite delightful and did seem to have a wonderful flow to it, even to my tone-deaf ears. I really liked the way you showed how singing or even humming can be a great way to praise God. This was a total delight.
Yvonne Blake 06/18/13
Oh wonderful! I could almost hear the tune as I read the words. This would be a great children's song.
Karen Pourbabaee 06/19/13
"In Christ there is a song"...my favorite line and a great theme. Your words had a natural happy rhythm and made me smile. Very good work!