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Wow you write with such honesty that I can feel the pain oozing off the page. The cry for help is tangible and just what God was waiting for before he scoops the MC in his arms. Beautiful!
06/09/13
What a creative twist on the topic. I did not see that coming the way it did. You have some wonderful, raw emotion packed into so few words.

The opening verse was my favorite, just for the line with being thumped by life. It was fresh and original. I did like how the verses became smaller and shorter as I read to the end, it really helped to drive the impact home. Great job!

I kind of wish it had a different title, only because it felt like it didn't do such a wonderful piece justice. :) But I know titles are tricky. Thanks for sharing this!
06/11/13
The pain in the MC was palpable. The ending with Jesus saving her, priceless and so true.

God bless you~