The Official Writing Challenge
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06/07/13
It is amazing to watch children express themselves at that age. I enjoyed reading this.

Double spacing between paragraphs helps the story read better. Just a tip.

Blessings, Lynn
This is a sweet story that left me with a smile. My only suggestions might be to have the teacher be named Ms. Smith so she stands out from the students. The other would be I'd love to read more, curious how each child would see thump differently. I imagine one might draw a rabbit, yet another, something darker liked being thumped aside his head. I could feel and hear the love for these so different kids flowing from the heart of the MC. You did a delightful job of bringing these characters to life. What an enjoyable read!
06/11/13
An adorably sweet read that touched my heart. Good job with bringing it to life.

God bless~