The Official Writing Challenge
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05/31/13
You did a nice job with the topic and touched my heart with the lovely ending, and I'm sure you will touch others as well.

God bless~
This is quite lovely. I especially enjoyed the little splashes of humor here and there. The last stanza speaks volumes. No matter how bad life is, if Jesus is in our hearts, our blessings will always outweigh our pain.
06/04/13
I loved this aaba form. It is difficult to do but you pulled it off beautifully and with a very fine message to boot. We all are guilty of this type of whining. Excellent!
06/04/13
Oh, this is cute... I am slightly fearing the TSA when I fly out for the FW conference(are you going?? You should!) later this month, as it will be my first time going through with my new hip... Hope they don't frisk me TOO badly. ;)

A few of the lines didn't seem to flow with the rhythm for me, particularly this line: Stopping to smell the roses was a wonderful blessing

Nice job over all. I like it!